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Section 3 Local RevisionsLanguage and style（第2页）
（2）ReseardicatesthatthemativecriticismofJeffersonDavisplacesthefullweightoftheSoutheronhishead。
Activity3-4:Usingunbiasedlanguage
&hefollowiainsawordwordsthatis（are）biased。Pleasefi。Discusswhytheselanguagesarebiasedandwhatyouakethemunbiased。
（1）Adoctorshouldalwayslookafterthebestiofhispatients。
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（2）Manisatool-buildinganimal。
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&isthaslearhosewho。
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（4）Agoodpoliowshisduty。
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3。Revisingwordsforadexaess
a。Revisingwordsforaccuracy
&writingisdtothepoint。Itusesavocabularyappropriatetothesubject。Ifyouknowyourtopicwell，youwillbeexawritingaboutit。Yourreaderswillklywhatyoumeanbecauseyouwilltellthemwithoutbeingvagueorfuzzy。You’llusetherightteicaltermsaailswhennecessary。
Activity3-5:Revisediforaccuracy
&hefollowingthstakeandseddraftsofastudeheinofIndiadifferencesdoyoufiwo?Andhowisthesedversioethaone?
&Version
&ionsofthefourmajorcasteswerespelledoutintheLawsofManu:TheBrahmi，theKshatriyascamethesed，theVaishyasfollowed，andtheSudraswereatthebottomofthepile。
TheSedVersion
&ionsofthefourmajorcasteswerespelledoutintheLawsofManu:TheBrahmieaterprettheVedas（holyscriptures），aherequiredritualsacrifices。TheKshatriyasweretobethewarriorsandsocialgovernors（evenkings）。TheVaishyasweretoteodtoengageinerordertocreatewealthforthetry。AsfortheSudras，theyweretobeetheservahreehighercastes-dwithoutmalient。
b。Revisingwordsforess
&hemosteffitristoedititforess。Youmayhavebeenstrugglingtothihroughasyouiledupalternativews。Oryoumayhavefalleofusihannecessaryjusttouseupspace。Ifyouletyinaldraft“”awhile，youwillfinizeunnecessarywordsahemout。Yourreaderwillthankyou!
Activity3-6:Revisingdiforess
Thefollowiences（es）arewrittewordsphrases。Seewhatyouakethemmorecise。
（1）TheanthropologicalstudyoftheIers。
（2）Theratifioftheagreementbytheboardrequiresavoteofamajority。
（3）DuringthattimeperiodtheparkareaulatedwithIndianswhoweresulleninappearandmadealivingbywwithsilvermetal。
（4）Theproblemerisbyaerofbusinessandpolitics。Basicallythetwobeevirtuallyeilforallisaheyotbeaddressedseparatelyiyortry。
